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I loved my mum, but
I hated it when she gave me the silent treatment
it always felt like I was Pompeii
and she was Mt Vesuvius.

But unlike the doomed city
I managed to survive
the inevitable eruption.

The fire and ash
still left its mark of course
I just grew an asbestos quality
as I got older.

But even volcanoes aren’t immortal.

They can go dormant at a moment’s notice
some like to make drama of it
some get the fireworks out and grab everyone’s attention
but not Mt Vesuvius.

She just lay quietly in the bathroom.
Silenced
like when you plug your ears with your fingers
to stop the sound getting in
Mt Vesuvius was plugged by a brain haemorrhage
to stop anything from getting out.

You know
I loved my mum, but
I hated it when she gave me the silent treatment.
One I wrote for uni
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconpoeticalcondition: critique:

I like your description of the silent treatment, and how you've compared it to the doom of Pompei. I like the fluidity of this work - its balanced, its definitely crisp in its detail, it doesn't get derailed from the content spoken off, and it is overall a really pleasurable read. I like how you've maintained the medium of presentation in this work. Its worth looking at and its worth reading :) Cheers.
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ThirteenthMonth Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
What's the course that you wrote this for?
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